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In recent years a large number of highly skilled professionals like doctors, engineers and IT professionals from poorer companies are leaving their countries for developed countries for better-paying jobs. What are the possible problems of this and what solutions can you suggest to deal with this issue?

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A short time ago many
skillful
having or showing knowledge and skill and aptitude
skilful
 employees like doctors, engineers and IT professionals are moving from their companies and nation to a developed nations for good earning in services. In
this
 essay we are going to discuss
on
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about
 its problems and solutions. People spend
more long
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longer
 hours at
work but
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work, but
 still are paid a handful of salary which is not sufficient for entire family survival. As the expenses are consistently increasing and there is no increase in salaries. Individuals find it very difficult to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 their needs and not satisfied.
For example
- an engineer would prefer to go out and stay as he would earn double the amount and live a luxurious life Organizations should increase the wages of staffs or else provide them annual bonuses which will help the fellows to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 their desires and needs towards themselves and families. Hike percent should be increased like 15% to 20%. Quarterly or early promotions should be held so that with the increase in market
rates
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rate
 workers can survive in difficult situations and are satisfied. In conclusion, I think that a rise in the annual income would make the people to hold back and not to travel to other developed country for better-paying jobs

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Brain drain
  • Human capital
  • Economic growth
  • Technological advancement
  • Healthcare crisis
  • Skill gap
  • Remittances
  • Policy reforms
  • International collaboration
  • Skill transfer
  • Incentive programs
  • Infrastructure
  • Job satisfaction
  • Domestic industries
  • Migration
  • Developing nations
  • Career opportunities
  • Recognition awards
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