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In many countries, obesity among children has drastically increased. Parents should be held responsible if their children are obese.

#countries #obesity #children #parents
Now a days due to
change
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changes
 in lifestyle and foods, kids mostly like to have fast foods which
causes
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cause
 excess fats in
body
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the body
 and is not good for health. It is the
Guardians
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Guardians'
Guardian's
 duty to look after their kid’s diet. Having
excess
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an excess
 of junk
food
 increases fats in the body.
Firstly
, kids are not capable enough to understand the difference between fast
food
 and healthy
food
. As kids mostly like to have sweets, chocolates,
fries etc
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fries, etc.
fries etc.
such
 kind of eatables which are not good for their health and having these
types
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type
 foods can lead to health issues.
For instance
, My cousin’s son, who is four years old would always get attracted towards candies, ice-creams as these eatables are
been
the state or fact of existing
being
 sold
in
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at
 very attractive way
in
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to
 market and kids get easily attracted towards them.
Moreover
, Kids always reciprocate their parents or elders in the family. They do observe them and do the same way. Kids observe everything very minutely and they do whatever they see. In
short we
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short, we
 can say that they are the mirror image of the parents. If parents prefer to have healthy
food
 children will
also
 have healthy
food
.
For example
, In family if both the parents have healthy
food
 like
chapatti
, vegetables, fruits kids will
also
 have the same foods as their parents have.
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