Some people think that the government should give financial support to artists such as musicians, painters and poets. Others think that it is a waste of money. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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task response

Ensure that your essay directly addresses the task prompt by discussing both views of government support for artists and providing your own opinion.

coherence and cohesion

Develop a clear essay structure by including an introduction, body paragraphs discussing each view, and a conclusion summarizing your opinion.

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Support your main points with specific examples related to the topic of government funding for artists, including both the arguments for and against such support.

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Make sure to directly answer the questions raised in the task and avoid discussing unrelated topics like research and development (R&D).

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

132 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Government funding
Cultural preservation
Economic development
Financial stability
Nurture talent
Innovation
Diverts resources
Critical services
Art market
Personal merit
Mediocrity
Dependency
Patrons
Sponsorship
Private funding

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Some people think that the government should give financial support to artists such as musicians, painters and poets. Others think that it is a waste of money. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

You and your friend have both been accepted to a study abroad programme in Paris France

To achieve personal happiness, the relationships we have with other people (friends, colleagues, family) are more essential than every other thing. Issues like wealth and occupations take the second place. Write to support this claim

Today our communications, medicine and transport systems all depend on computer technology. Our reliance on computer technology in these fields has created a dangerous situation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

The popularity of online education has grown significantly in recent years. Do you think this is positive or negative development?

Most schools give their students grades based on their performance. Why do so many schools utilise this method of student evaluation? In what ways does this affect students?