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Some people think that the government should give financial support to artists such as musicians, painters and poets. Others think that it is a waste of money. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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task response
Ensure that your essay directly addresses the task prompt by discussing both views of government support for artists and providing your own opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Develop a clear essay structure by including an introduction, body paragraphs discussing each view, and a conclusion summarizing your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Support your main points with specific examples related to the topic of government funding for artists, including both the arguments for and against such support.
task response
Make sure to directly answer the questions raised in the task and avoid discussing unrelated topics like research and development (R&D).

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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