When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to tru and keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

There is a natural tendency for people's
culture
to be threatened by technological advancement as a country develops. In my opinion, I strongly disagree that developments in technology should be allowed to replace people's
cult
ure.
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the people's culture
Firstly
,
culture
is a strong tool on fostering
pe
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in
for
ace and unity in a country.
Culture
is expressed through art, languages and traditional skills
such
as: pottery making, painting, local wrestling and dance. When these practices are shared among a group of people, it strengthens the bond and oneness that exist between them.
Secondly
, it is of utmost benefit that our ways of life and traditional skills are passed down to our children for the preservation of our history.
For example
, in my home town, there are yearly festivals that mark significant moments in our history during which there are many cultural works on display in the form of art, dance and food. These festivals continue to be celebrated generations after generations e
nsuring that
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generations, ensuring
such
priceless moments are never forgotten.
On the contrary
, it might be posited by some, that
culture
repels the advancement of technology. They may argue that the old methods do not allow new ideas thrive and
hence
get in the way of progress.
This
is rather far fetched, as countries with the best technological advancements are known to have the richest c
ultural her
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the rich
itage
such
as China, France and Germany. In summary, I strongly beleive that
efforts
accept as true; take to be true
believe
should be made to preserve peoples
culture
in the presence of technological advancements, due to its numerous benefits and despite the argument to the contrary.
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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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