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Some people believe that the personal information of violent criminals should be made available to the public. Others think that this information should be protected.

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Some people have a belief that it is better to open violent criminals' individual
information
 to the public, but
on the other hand
, many think it should be preserved. In my opinion, there are more advantages via making available to access to criminals'
information
 to the public because criminals can live along with us to redo the crimes to fulfil their satisfaction. It is commonly believed that personal
information
 about violent
criminals has
Accept comma addition
criminals, has
 to be available to access to the public. It is because having knowledge of criminals in one's mind leads people to warn each other to protect from a reputation of what criminals have done in
past
Suggestion
the past
. As an illustration, in Korea, there was a guy, named Ho-
sun
the star that is the source of light and heat for the planets in the solar system
Sun
 Kang, who has done a total number of five sexual crimes, he has redone the sexual violence to young kids (who were only 5 to 7 years old). When it came to his
second
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Conversely
, many argue that violent criminals'
information
 is necessary to be protected on account of securing their fundamental human rights and human dignity.
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