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Describe a present you received which was made by hand

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I’m going to tell you about a sweet and romantic period of my life- my
first
 boyfriend! I was 16 at the time and completely smitten (in love). Since neither of us worked at the time, we would always make each other gifts for special occasions,
such
 as anniversaries, birthdays, or the holidays. I’ll tell you about one
gift
 that I’ll never forget. He made me a collage (art made with several cut up pictures) of all the stages of our friendship and relationship. He must have gone to a print shop to print out all these pictures that carefully cut them out and made a tasteful wall collage with them. The special part of the
gift
 was that he formed the letters of our names out of pictures, Anna and Dave. I thought
this
 was a really creative way to celebrate our love. Looking back,
this
gift
 is a bit corny (foolish or not tasteful), but at that time I felt completely blown away (really happy and surprised) by it. We had been friends since we were children, so we had a ton of memories together.
Furthermore
, our relationship was 4 years long! I liked that he was thoughtful enough to put the effort into
this
 kind of
gift
.
Moreover
, I felt really emotional looking at the way he told the story of our friendship that turned into love through photos. In conclusion, these
sort
Suggestion
sorts
 of acts were the key to my heart as a teen girl!
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