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Recent years, the number of crimes committed by young people in major cities throughout the world is increasing. Discuss this issue. Give reasons and suggest some solutions.

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Nowadays, the graph of offences raising gradually, most commonly it is increasing in the youth of our world within metro cities. There are several issues and measures regarding
this
 topic which will be elaborated
further
 with relevant examples. To embark on, there are many reasons from which few of them are as follows.
First
 and foremost is consumption of toxic things like drugs bear cigarette and many more.
Moreover
, due to consuming
this
 kind of poison one cannot has control on their mind and they commit crime which is sometimes small or big.
For instance
, they do robbery or many times rape, which gives very bad impact on society.
Furthermore
, our system of giving justice is very e weak and that's why the youngsters get more encouragement of putting crime into action.
Secondly
, the teenagers completed their academic studies, but they did not get their desire jobs, due to
pressure
Suggestion
the pressure
pressures
 of society and family for the earnings they committed an unlawful act. Focusing on the solutions regarding
this
 issue are as follows. Former one is good
sacrosane
a white or silvered surface where pictures can be projected for viewing
screen
 from the mentors and trainers from the age of juvenile.
For example
 the families should learn them how
to help
Suggestion
helping
 others with better customs and tradition. The latter view is that the young people should get their desired jobs and payroll so that the youth cannot forget the right path of legality and always follow the good path.
For instance
, the government should manufacture new companies and give jobs to them so the economy will boost up and crime rates will reduce. To conclude, it is not possible by the legislature to demolish the offence completely, but they have to organise different events for the youngsters so they got stuck in it and can only follow good path.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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