The graph below shows the consumption of fish and different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given graph illustrates information about the number of grams per person consumed in a variety of food
such
as fish, meat, beef, lamb and chicken, which had taken a place in a European country in a period of years from 1979 until 2004. It can be clearly seen from the graph the fish had Linking Words
a constant stable figures
over the years.
Correct the article-noun agreement
constant stable figures
a constant stable figure
According to
what Linking Words
seen
between 1979 and 1989, beef contributed the highest proportion of consumable foods about 230 and 240 grams, respectively, after that Add a missing verb
was seen
showd
a significant drop to reach the lowest in 2004 at about 150.
Chichen was eaten in 1979 Correct your spelling
showed
show
shows
by
150 grams per person and Change preposition
at
then
it starts to be a food choice for most Linking Words
of
Change preposition
apply
the
people in 2004 was 250 g/person. In comparison, lamb at the first was much higher than Correct article usage
apply
the
chicken Correct article usage
apply
than
showed a rapid decrease by the end of the period to reach 90.
Correct your spelling
then
To sum up
, the most Linking Words
foods
Fix the agreement mistake
food
were
eaten by Unnecessary verb
apply
the
people was Correct article usage
apply
the
chicken Correct article usage
apply
especially
in 2004.Add the comma(s)
,especially
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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