Successful sports professionals earn a lot of more money than people in other important professions. Some people think that this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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today’s time, sports of all
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kinds
have taken a new shape in
entertainment
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the entertainment industry
industry
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. People in their free time want to spend quality time with their family and friends watching their
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
sports. While some argue that it is injustice to other
professionals
the body of people in a learned occupation
professions
which are more important for
society
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, I agree with those who are in
favor
promote over another
favour
of them. One the one hand, there are more important professionals who give their life to
society
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as doctors, public service officer and security personals etc.
supporter
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of the view that it is unjust for
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any of various alternatives; some other
another
profession if sportsmen earn way too much than them
often say
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often, say
that social service personals should be paid higher than entertainment
industry
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.
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, they hold their
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views
that
sports
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the sports industry
industry
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is an entertainment
industry
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and should not be on our priority.
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they entertain us, should not be
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ranked
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for
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the people who build a
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, in my view, it is completely justified for them to earn higher because their career span is much shorter than any other profession exists. A sportsman starts his career at a very young age around 18 or even 17 and ends it little over his mid-thirties.
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, a gymnast starts his career at
young age
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a young age
and have to take retirement on or before 30 years.
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today's
sports
industry
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has become so big that it has created a lot of jobs and support an economy to grow more and more. It would be not be unjustified for them to earn a little more. In conclusion,
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we have more important profession
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running
a
society
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smoother, sports person is important because they entertain us and creates a parallel economy for our
society
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial remuneration
  • exceptional
  • merit
  • talent
  • demand
  • entertainment value
  • career span
  • physical demands
  • justified
  • unfair
  • criticism
  • income inequality
  • societal priorities
  • sportsmanship
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