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Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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In today's competitive world, people are working longer hours than they used to do in the past;
as a result
, they get very little
time
 for
leisure
 activities. Spending less
time
 on relaxing activities can have a negative impact on emotional and physical health
although
 it can help people to save more
money
.
This
 essay describes both the advantages and the disadvantages of working late and getting a little
time
 to relax,
moreover
, I believe
this
 has more disadvantages. The major advantages of working long hours and spending less
time
 on
leisure
 activities are earning and saving more
money
.
Firstly
, in most developed countries wages are paid on an hourly basis, which means by working long hours’ people can earn more
money
.
Secondly
, it has been observed that some of the
leisure
 activities are expensive and getting less
time
 for these activities can help individuals to save more
money
.
For example
, some people consider shopping as a
leisure
 activity;
therefore
, they can save the most amount of
money
 by getting little or no
time
 for shopping.
However
, working late and getting less
time
 to relax can adversely affect one’s personal and professional life.
Firstly
, it can increase the level of stress because of work pressure.
Secondly
, getting less personal
time
 can lead towards depression.
Thirdly
, working long hours and getting less
time
 to relax or workout can negatively affect one’s physical health. In conclusion,
although
 working extra hours and spending less
time
 on relaxing activities can help in saving more
money
;
however
, the disadvantages of working long hours and spending less
time
 on
leisure
 activities exceed the advantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • stress relief
  • productivity
  • economic growth
  • career progression
  • skill enhancement
  • quality time
  • financial security
  • leisure activities
  • physical health
  • personal relationships
  • stress-related illnesses
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