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Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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In today's competitive world, people are working longer hours than they used to do in the past;
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, they get very little
time
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 for
leisure
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 activities. Spending less
time
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 on relaxing activities can have a negative impact on emotional and physical health
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 it can help people to save more
money
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.
This
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 essay describes both the advantages and the disadvantages of working late and getting a little
time
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 to relax,
moreover
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, I believe
this
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 has more disadvantages. The major advantages of working long hours and spending less
time
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 on
leisure
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 activities are earning and saving more
money
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.
Firstly
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, in most developed countries wages are paid on an hourly basis, which means by working long hours’ people can earn more
money
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.
Secondly
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, it has been observed that some of the
leisure
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 activities are expensive and getting less
time
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 for these activities can help individuals to save more
money
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.
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, some people consider shopping as a
leisure
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 activity;
therefore
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, they can save the most amount of
money
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 by getting little or no
time
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 for shopping.
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, working late and getting less
time
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 to relax can adversely affect one’s personal and professional life.
Firstly
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, it can increase the level of stress because of work pressure.
Secondly
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, getting less personal
time
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 can lead towards depression.
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, working long hours and getting less
time
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 to relax or workout can negatively affect one’s physical health. In conclusion,
although
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 working extra hours and spending less
time
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 on relaxing activities can help in saving more
money
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;
however
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, the disadvantages of working long hours and spending less
time
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 on
leisure
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 activities exceed the advantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • stress relief
  • productivity
  • economic growth
  • career progression
  • skill enhancement
  • quality time
  • financial security
  • leisure activities
  • physical health
  • personal relationships
  • stress-related illnesses
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