The tendency of news reports in the media to focus more on problems and emergencies rather than on positive developments is harmful to the individuals and the society as a whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The communication media present a higher number of difficult and dangerous situations
over
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Over
than the positive news. Some people said that
this
could be harmful for the
human kind
all of the living human inhabitants of the earth
humankind
and for the inhabitants. I agree that the negative situations had to be informed, but it is
also
important to give the people hope in their society that expands the social development.
In
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On
one hand, the head titles of a newspaper or television news in the 90 % of the cases are related to
murders
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the murders
, war, emergencies,
roberies
larceny by threat of violence
robberies
or corruption. The
highlited
move into the foreground to make more visible or prominent
highlighted
topic
are most related
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is most related
most relates
to the worst face of a society,
this
situation could be harmful from local to international view.
For example
, in Colombia the tourism decreased 40 % because the TV news
inform
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informs
that the rains had been affected the roads of the country, when in reality that situation only affects two areas.
On the other hand
, the positive facts
likewise
a
sports
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sport
, environment and
animals
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animal
protection, new scientific development or a new picturesque art
galery
spectators at a golf or tennis match
gallery
galleries
; had been located as
seconday
being of second rank or importance or value; not direct or immediate
secondary
information that gives the
opportunitie
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunity
to
fullfield
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fulfil
fulfilled
the blank spaces in the newspaper page or the extra time in the TV news.
However
, it is important to include more positive information,
firstly
, because it promotes a numerous of
grate
a person who has achieved distinction and honor in some field
great
ideas
,
Accept space
,
and,
secondly
, due to impact
in
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on
of
the social development. In conclusion, I think that the communication media must informed the true facts, but that should
included
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include
negative and positive topics and attend the details of
bouth
two things or people together
both
Burt
boat
with
profesionalisim
the expertness characteristic of a professional person
professionalism
and equal opportunities.
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