You applied to a job, were offered the position, but have decided not to accept the offer. Write a letter to the HR supervisor with whom you interviewed. -In your letter: Explain the reason why you are declining the offer -Describe your reasons for staying with your current position - Express your gratitude. Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Ms. Barry,
Dear Ms.Barry,
I hope you are doing well. I am writing
this
letter to inform you that unfortunately
I cannot take the offer as a senior customer service ambassador at the company.
The reason why I have to reject the offer is because the workplace I might be working in is too far for me. Add a comma
unfortunately,
While
I have transportation to work, the fuel fees are a big problem to
me.
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for
Moreover
, since I decided to quit my job, my employer has offered to promote me to a higher position such
as Customer Service Manager and upgrade my salary. In addition
, the location of the new offer is my main concern.
All of
all, I am very appreciative that you are the one who gave me Change preposition
in
such
an opportunity to take this
job. Please accept my sincere apology that I have declined this
job.
If you have any concerns or questions please inform me immediately. Thank you so much for your kindness.
Yours sincerely,
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coherence cohesion
The letter is generally well-organized, but can benefit from clearer paragraphing and better cohesion between ideas. Consider introducing each paragraph with a topic sentence that summarises the paragraph's main idea. Also, make sure that each idea flows smoothly into the next with appropriate use of connectors.
task achievement
While you have addressed the main tasks, there is room to develop the reasons for declining the offer and the benefits of staying with your current job more fully. Include more details and specific examples to explain your decision clearly, which will help achieve a more complete and developed response.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite