IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 5.5

Many Individuals believe that Teachers should be paid according to how much their students learn, while others don't opine the same. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

#individuals #teachers #students #opine
Many individuals believe that
remuneration
Suggestion
the remuneration
 of teachers should be as per their students' results, while others don't feel like that and suggest it to be, the way it is. I believe, the learner's result as output is subjective to his/her passion of interest rather than the mentor's skill. In
this
 essay, I will argue for the unbiased
paychecks
 of teachers.
To begin
 with, for
one
 set of people the only yardstick to judge are the results. They consider it only, by presuming it should be the same for every individual candidate in a
subject
. The latest technological analysis supports
this
 idea, by stating, that a
skilfull
having or showing knowledge and skill and aptitude
skilful
skilfully
 mentor can produce better results than in comparison to others, who are not up to that supreme potential.
For Instance
, a study published by Times mentioned that in major Universities across the globe, Teachers
are paid
Suggestion
pay
 30% more than their peers, whose results are inevitably 50% better than their peers.
However
, the grasping power of every candidate is very subjective as per his/her interest. The student, who is good in Math, might not be the case for English
subject
; wherein passion lies more in
one
 over the other. Irrespective of Trainer's commitment and competency
to
Suggestion
in
 the
subject
, it is bound to be the distinguished results for each Individual in different courses. To illustrate, it is observed that the same student has been able to achieve 90% in
one
subject
, while only 60% in the other
one
. To conclude, I believe,
this
 noble profession to be kept intact, away from senseless discrimination of results bound pay checks despite the fact, their fellow learners' captivity towards each individual
subject
.
Therefore
,
this
 noble profession can be survived with
this
 prejudice.
Submitted by apexinfo57 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: