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【V1】There are both problems and benefits for high school students study plays and works of theatres written centuries ago. Discuss and use your own experience as examples.【V2】Do you think school should have curriculum asking students to play old dramas and works of theatres centuries ago?

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Nowadays, whether schools should let students play old dramas or not has attracted controversies. Some people believe that students should learn
works
Suggestion
the works
 of theatres to learn literature, while others suggest that educational institutions should not waste students' time. In my view, schools should provide students with a chance to be exposed to old dramas. It is paramount for students to understand
different countries’
Suggestion
the different countries’ cultural backgrounds
different countries’ cultural backgrounds
culture
 backgrounds and history through play old dramas. Individuals can know the classical
culture
 and increase
culture
 deposit by play the
work
 of
theatres
Suggestion
the theatres
.
For example
, students who played Romeo and Juliet can have a better understanding of the cultural backgrounds of the merchant of Venice.
Moreover
, students can widen the range of knowledge and improve cultural confidence, as well as experience a diverse
culture
.
However
, some people may argue that the negative influence of play old dramas cannot be ignored.
First
 and foremost, most of the
work
 of theatres of
work
 is difficult to understand the lack of real significance.
For instance
, the English used in Shakespeare's
work
 was different from what we use today.
Also
, if students spend much time practicing dramas, they will have less time to study, which brings more pressure on the study. To sum up, I
am more incline
Suggestion
am more inclined
 with the idea that students should be exposed to old dramas, even though, it may influence students’ study negatively.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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