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Band 5.5

You recently started commuting to work by bicycle and discovered that there is a problem with bicycle parking near the building where you work. Write a letter to the building manager. In your letter, •explain the reason for using a bicycle to commute • mention what problems you have encountered with parking • what you recommend to solve the problems

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Dear Sir, I am writing
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 letter to inform you that there is a parking issue in our building as I started to commute
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by

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 bicycle
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apply

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last
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 week and there is no empty space to park it. I will explain the condition by providing all the information which I noticed.
Firstly
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, it is beneficial for me to travel to work by bicycle as it is a good way to keep the body in
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perfect shape.
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it
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, it saves my time because there is a huge traffic rush in the morning hours and it
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economically
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me economically

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Therefore
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, I
decide
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decided

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 to commute by cycle.
Moreover
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, our building has less space for vehicles but there is a problem that workers even parking their cars
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in

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 the area which is assigned to
the
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cycles or motorcycles. The slots available for bicycles are already limited and some staff members make it worse by parking their cars over there. Now, I cannot ask you to expand the parking zone
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for

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bicycle
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bicycles

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.
However
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, I request you to make
intervention
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an intervention

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 so that employees park their vehicles
according to
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 the
allocate
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allocated

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 zones. I hope you consider
this
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 in mind and take
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quick action on
this
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. Yours Sincerely, LS

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task achievement
Provide more specific details and examples about the parking issue and its impact.
coherence cohesion
Ensure a clear flow and logical organization of ideas throughout the letter.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary to enhance the overall quality of writing.
grammatical range
Pay attention to sentence structure and grammar to avoid errors.
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