some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. others,however,believe that school is the place to learn this. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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a child's life
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believed
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school
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the right place
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both the opinion would be discussed.
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with, some books are represented parents are the
first
teacher of the children and they can teach many
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life things
who helps in children future
life
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parents are
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children and learn many things by following them.
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who parents spend most of with their children they can understand
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the child's thoughts
child's thoughts
and make
better person
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better people
better persons
a better person
of
society
.
parents
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Parents
should teach some basic things like honesty and how to respect
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advanced in years; ('aged' is pronounced as two syllables)
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good members
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have provided
provide
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the totality of surrounding conditions
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parents maintain love and peace inside the home so children nature is
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The school
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is
also
right place to teach children.
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children's
child's
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school, children
learns
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and commitment.
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a good society member
society
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.
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, children make new friends in
school
and learn many things from them.
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School
life
is very important in every
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child's
child
life
. To be concluded, parents and teacher should equally important in every
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child's
child
life
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parents respect
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at
school
learn many things from different people and
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both these things
are
imporant
of great significance or value
important
to become a good
society
member
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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