More and more people are moving away from an agricultural background to relocate to cities in order to look for work. What will be the consequences of this? What solutions can you offer?

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Many
countries
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country
country's
income
source
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sources
is
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are
mainly dependent on Agriculture. A drastic decrease in the food production can be seen over a decade due to the people who are changing their profession from agriculture and moving to cities to find a new profitable employment. In the
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part of the essay, I am going to discuss about the outcome of
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and in the
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part, I am going to provide a solution which can regulate the issue. Farmer's moving out of farming causes high damage to the nation. It increases the scarcity of food products which is one of the basic necessities for any individual to survive. So the demand for the products will rise due to low-production.
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will
skyhigh
(with verb 'to blow') destroyed completely; blown apart or to pieces
sky-high
the prices, impacts lower and middle class families.
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, a survey conducted in India states, more than 30% of the vegetables and
grains
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grain
prices had been increased in the past 5 years due to availability issues. Implementing few solutions can be helpful to prevent the problem and helps farmers to stick with their profession. The main problem is being faced by the farmers is having a middle man in between the buyer and sellers causing profitability issues.
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First point
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The first point
is to eliminate them and the other one is, the government should be involved and start special packages for the people in farming and offer them loans for a minimal interest rate without any stipulated time frame to
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pay back
the loan.
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, China started to encourage farming by giving them loans for 2 percent interest rate and government imports the leftover for a good marginal price which benefits a lot of farmers. In
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a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
, people
to continue
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continue
their farming profession and not to move to other locations, associations should eliminate the middle man process
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in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
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offers them loan whenever required and government's should start scheme's to
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buy back
the leftover from the farmers to save them from losses.

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