The only way to improve road safety is to give much stricter punishments on driving offenses. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many people believe that imposing harsher
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driving
offenses
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is the most useful measure to enhance
road
safety
. I largely disagree with
this
view. It is quite understandable why people claim that more severely punishable actions should be taken by
government
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to have better
road
safety
. The two most notable causes of fatal accidents
in
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the
road
are that a large
amount
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of drivers are likely to be indeed addicted and exposed a lot to alcohol and in turn
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be drunk when
they
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commuting
,
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and driving above the speed limit, which is one of the most popular crimes
commited
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committed
by people .
Therefore
, giving much stricter
punishments
such
as fining them much higher money or even custodial sentence can render them more careful and entail a falling mortality rate.
However
, I believe that education is by far the most effective
measures
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so as
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to improve
road
safety
. To the best of my knowledge, the odds of
commiting
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committing
driving offences sometimes
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on the attitude of drivers. The government and
school
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schools
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should organise a
lager
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number of driving
lesson
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lessons
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to educate them about the negative consequences of accidents on victims and themselves.
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to
punishments
,
the
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increasing awareness is more practical and time and
money saving
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. To illustrate, if students are taught about attention when driving in the early days, the latter will become the inherent instinct of their life and prevent them from a lot of misdeeds. In conclusion, my
convinction
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conviction
is that
punishments
are important but education is the better solution to tackle
road
safety
problems.

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