Many people think that successful people’s accomplishments depend on the regions they come from, while other people think that it doesn’t matter where a person comes from, if that person has the will to succeed, he/she will triumph. What do you think?.

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It is aptly said that "If there is a will, there is a way". Anyone can be successful and can write his or her name on the pages of the Golden History. In following paragraphs, I will discuss whether
region
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a region
from where a
person
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comes can contribute to their success or not. To start with, if a
person
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wants to gain certain achievements, the only way I feel is the sheer hard work, perseverance, and faith no matter from where he or she is coming.
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, the business tycoon of the India Dhirubhai Ambani was from the lower middle-class family
of
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in
a small village of the Gujarat state. Unavailability of the resources and development did not hinder his success.
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, once becoming successful, he developed his village so that youngsters do not face the difficulties he had faced.
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, the environment affects the
person
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's overall development.
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, teachers, parents, and
neighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
definitely reflect
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on
the
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
of an individual.
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to
this
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,
availability
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the availability
of the new technology certainly helps people to move forward and keep pace with the world.
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, there are certain athletes in India who don't get proper training and environment or equipment
can not
can not
cannot
compete with the international sports persons. To wrap up, I feel that right combination of
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person's will
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the person's will
a person's will
, hard-work, environment to grow and the availability of the opportunities are essential for success.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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