6. More and more companies are allowing employees to work at home. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

It is undo
ubtable tha
too obvious to be doubted
indubitable
t more employees have  employers' permission to
work
at
home
rather than in offices. I definitely believe that
this
phenomenon is a positive development in human history because of  many
benefits for
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the many benefits
employees and their employers.  The essay will list two benefits,
such
as  flexible working schedule and
time
saving while working at
home
To begin
with, working at
home
provides a flexible working schedule  because employees will have access to the tasks online via computers at any
time
For example
, writers and journalists are able to compose their articles at
home
and
then
summit them via e-mail online.
As a result
, they can carry out their tasks anytime during days
basing on
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the days, basing
the days basing
their  personal working schedules. Without office
time
limitation, employees will be able to organize their time
s mor
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time
e flexibly.
Moreover
, they will feel more delight because there are no limitation of strict office hours and free monitoring from their supervisors. 
As a result
,
t
hi
Accept space
,
s will contribute more
product by
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more productively
happy employees and add more profit to c
om
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for
panies. 
In addition
, working at
home
will help employees to save much
time
. In the contemporary era, spec
ially liv
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
ing a metropolis, many people need to spend many hours in commuting daily.
For example
, many local residents living in General Toronto Area spend 2-3 hours daily in commuting to
work
because many of them live in subu
rban region due
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the suburban region
a suburban region
suburban regions
to extremely high housing price in downtown Toronto.
Therefore
, working at
home
will save much 
time
for them daily so that they will have more
time
for their personal life or family as well. Saving
time
and energy to commute to
work
will help employees to focus on their jobs either.
Furthermore
, working at
home
in pers
onal private pla
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personal, private
ce will enhance employees' efficiency as well.  Overall, working at
home
will not only bring many benefits for certain kinds of empl
oyees but
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employees, but
also
will enhance the product.
Moreover
, it
also
provides a flexible schedules for employees and help employees to save time
s. 
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time
Therefore
, allowing employees to
work
at
home
will bring positive contribute to companies and societies.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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