Many people say that the only way to guarantee a good job is to complete a course of university education. Others claim that it is better to start work after school and gain experience in the world of work. how far do you agree or disagree with the above views? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is well-accepted that
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certificate or
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is one of must accesses during many
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applications in current
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force;
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, the majority of parents tackle to help their child or children be enrolled in one of top
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education. 
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, completing a course in
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will learn the basic skills and knowledges so that new graduates will be more competent for jobs they apply .
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example, after graduating from
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and obtaining a degree in accounting, graduates hired in banks or companies are competent in many basic skills,
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a basic level
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imply what kinds of knowledge and skills that the graduates possess after completing all required courses.
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,
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courses provide a systemic approach in training the learners in all aspects which are required in workforce place.
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 some people advocate that experience gained during working are more important because hand-on experience is not offered by
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courses, the skills learned as working is not systemic and only focus on certain areas in terms of the jobs.
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provides opportunities to master some skills,
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courses.  Allover,
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courses will provide opportunities for learners to learn many basic skills which are necessary for their future careers. The courses will assist learners to prepare the tasks in workforce worldwide.
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, I support that before obtaining a full-time
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in
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work, it is necessary to earn a degree from
university
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or
diploma
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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