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Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #work #organisation #life #organisations
NOWADAYS PEOPLE'S CHOICE HAVE BEEN CHANGING SINCE DECADE AS TECHNOLOGY ENHANCED.
THEREFORE
, CERTAIN FOLKS BELIEVE TO STICK TO THE
ONE
 EMPLOYER WHEREAS REST OF THE PUBLIC OPPOSE THE AND SAYS THAT IT IA A GOOD IDEA TO HAVE DIVERT EMPLOYER. SO,
FIRSTLY
,
THIS
 ESSAY WILL DISCUSS THE VARIOUS BENEFITS OF DOING
ONE
 JOB FOR LIFETIME AND
SECONDLY
, WHY IS A GOOD IDEA TO WORK WITH MORE THAN
ONE
 ORGANIZATION.
LASTLY
, STATE THE OPINION IN THE FAVOR OF WORK WITH
ONE
 ORGANISATION DUE TO THE MORE ADVANTAGES THAN DISADVANTAGES. WHAT I BELIEVE, IF WE WORK FOR THE SAME ORGANIZATION, WE COULD BE ABLE TO ACHIEVE MORE ACCOMPLISHMENT IN A VERY SHORT TIME. OWNING TO, WE ALREADY ADAPTED WITH OFFICE WORK SYSTEM AND ENVIRONMENT. ON THE
ONE
 HAND, THE MAJOR PROS OF WORKING IN THE SAME OFFICE FOR A LIFETIME IS THAT IT WOULD GIVE A STABLE PROFESSIONAL
LIFE
 AND
ALSO
 SUCCESSFUL WITH LOTS OF PROMOTIONS.
THIS
 WOULD RESULT IN HIGHER KNOWLEDGE AND INCREASED EXPERIENCE THAT WHAT NEEDED TO MAKE
LIFE
 HAZZLE FREE.
FOR EXAMPLE
, AS PER THE AFFRICAN EMPLOYMENT AGENCIES REPORT, 70% OF THE AFFRICAN CIVILIAN PREFERED TO STICK WITH
ONE
 EMPLOYER AS
THIS
 IS PROVIDING AN EASY WAY TO HAVE STABLE
LIFE
.
ON THE OTHER HAND
, CHANGING EMPLOYERS FREQUENTLY GIVES COURAGES TO STAND WITH DIFFICULTIES IN
LIFE
. OWNING TO THE FACT PERSON HAS TO ADDAPT EERYTIME WITH NEW ENVIRONMWNT WHICH COULS BE CHALLANGING. PERHAPS, ONNCE IT IS DINE
THEN
 PERSON IS ABLE TO DEAL WITH ANYKIND OF SITUATION IN
LIFE
 NO MATTER WHAT.
FOR INSTANCE
, INDIAN YOUTH WORKING STYLE SUVERY REVEALED THAT 50% OF THE YOUNGER WORKERS HOOSE TO CHANGE THEIRE JOB AS THEY HAVE DESIRE TO HAVE DIFFERENT EXPERIENCE IN
LIFE
 DUE TO THE INTERESTENIG CHANLLANGES. IN CONCLUSION, WORK WITH
ONE
 OR MORE ORGANISATION INDEED PROVIDE A PLETHORA OF BENEFITS. PERHAPPS, TO ACHIEVE DESIRE SUCESS IN
LIFE
 REQUIRES A CONTINUEOUS LEARNING IN THE SAME FIELD.
THEN
, SURELY, PERSON WOULD NOT DISSATISFIED WITH HIS ACHIEVEMENT.
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