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The Internet when used as a source of information, has more drawbacks than advantages. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

#internet #source #information
There is no doubt these days
internet
 is playing a major role in our lives.
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: Is
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internet
information
 as
source
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 affecting our lives? Is considered one of the most controversial issues today. In
this
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 I am going to examine
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both viewpoints. On one side of the
argument
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 there were
people
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who argue
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 that the benefits considerably
outweigh
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 the disadvantages. The main reason for believing that the
internet
 has all the articles and the
researches
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that
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done by different organizations and researchers up to date. A good illustration of that the
people
 at home simply can search for anything with less effort and money and they can put it in their paper or
to
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share it with other
people
. It is possible to say that
the
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people
 can find many
sources
 on the
internet
 up to date as well the old
sources
. A particular good example of that searching
on
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the
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online
sources
 at your
convenient
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 time better than
you have
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having
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fixed
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 time to read an article or book, so the
internet
 makes our life easy.
Moreover
, It is
also
 possible to consider it with
opposing
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 case, It is often
people
 argued that since there are lots of
hacker
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those
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 days it makes it difficult to rely on websites that we do not know their reliability. It is often argued that because the recent statistic shows a high percentage of hacking.
In addition
, anyone can open a website and publish any
information
 they want, so we do not
this
information
 is true or false. We have seen there are no easy answers
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this
 question. On balance,
however
, I tend to believe that we need to use
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books and
the
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actual published articles as
sources
 of our
information
 rather than writing a paper with fake
information
 that might somebody take
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as
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sources
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 of
his
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information
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Misinformation
  • Fake news
  • Verification
  • Information overload
  • Privacy concerns
  • Screen time
  • Internet addiction
  • Credibility
  • Bias
  • Critical thinking
  • In-depth research
  • Peer-reviewed
  • Reliable sources
  • Data security
  • Skepticism
  • Discernment
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