At the present time, the population of some countries include a relatively large number of young adults, compared to the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweighs the disadvantages?

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Youth are the strength of every
country
as they have lot of en
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lots
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,
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um and inno
a feeling of excitement
enthusiasm
vative ideas which help a
country
to make the progress. Recent studies have shown that some of the leading countries of the world are having more yongsters
than the
a young person of either sex
youngsters
older citizens.
However
, I believe that there are several consequences of
this
situation which will impact these counties, reasons are decribed
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the accumulation of knowledge or skill that results from direct participation in events or activities
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older, experienced
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the right direction
secondly
if any
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Secondly if
country
has more young
adult
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then
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time, then
time than
time than than
country
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the future
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older, and
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good, but
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic
  • workforce
  • productivity
  • innovation
  • skilled labor
  • social development
  • technology
  • dividend
  • competition
  • resources
  • social welfare
  • unrest
  • instability
  • healthcare
  • elderly care
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