Some people think that governments should ban dangerous sports, while others think people should have freedom to do any sports or activity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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It is clear that extreme sports are dangerous, so some people think the government should prohibit it. While Others argue that people have the right to do any kind of sports that they want. In my opinion, I believe people should have freedom to participate in any activities. There are some reasons why government should ban dangerous sports.
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, since Extreme sports will leave a long lasting injuries on people physical health. Bones broken,
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, it will make people hard to move or do heavy jobs in the future, so the quality of life will reduce day by day.
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, Dangerous sports can cause mental illness. The most dangerous example is plant-life. People will be paralysed since their brain is damaged by collapsing while playing.
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disease is likely to cause permanent affected, and the percentage of recovery is very low.
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, government should consider about banning
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kind of sport.
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extreme sports some time can be fatal, I still believe that players always are protected by producers and take many beneficial from extreme sports.
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, nowadays, Companies who provide dangerous sports are more and more strictly about the procedures and protect equipments.
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, jumping from a plane, players must have one professional coach to jump with them, and reject the person who under 18 to play.
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, extreme sports can help players release stress effectively, so they can improve the productivity and creativity in the workplace. In conclusion, I believe with the development of equipment and severe disciplines nowadays, people are free to play dangerous sports without worrying about its' negative sides.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • severe injuries
  • fatalities
  • base jumping
  • bull running
  • extreme skiing
  • safeguard
  • well-being
  • regulating
  • avoidable harm
  • healthcare costs
  • burdening
  • personal freedom
  • autonomy
  • training
  • equipment
  • mitigated
  • personal satisfaction
  • mental health benefits
  • resilience
  • adventure
  • assess risks
  • public safety
  • unnecessary healthcare costs
  • outright bans
  • balanced approach
  • stringent safety standards
  • mandatory training sessions
  • adequately informed
  • safeguarding
  • public health
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