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Nowadays in many countries women have full time jobs.Therefore,it is logical to share household tasks evenly between men and women.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The bar chart illustrates the
proportion
 of women, men and
children
 consuming five servings of
fruit
 and
vegetables
 each day in 8 years from 2001 to 2008 in the UK
Overall
, it can be seen that the highest percentage of all people consuming
fruit
 and
vegetables
 was women,
while
children
 consistently accounted for the lowest
proportion
.
Furthermore
, a significant increase in the
proportion
 of people eating these food items can be seen over the period given. The percentage of women who ate
fruit
 and
vegetables
 started at just over 20% in 2001.
This
 figure
then
 rose steadily to reach a peak of almost 35% in 2006, before falling slightly to 30% in the final year. In
rms
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terms
 of men and
children
 eating
fruit
 and
vegetables
, the rate remained relatively stable in the first three years (about 17% and 12% respectively). From
this
 point, the
proportion
 of men climbed gradually to peak at about 27% in both 2006 and 2007, after which it dropped to about 26%. A similar growth in the figure for
children
 was evident reaching 25% in 2007 and around 24% in the final year.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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