MANY PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT SOCIAL NETWORKING SITES (SUCH AS FACEBOOK) HAVE HAD A HUGE NEGATIVE IMPACT ON BOTH INDIVIDUALS AND SOCIETIES.

Social networking sites,
for example
, Facebook, are considered to harm individuals as well as societies.
However
, I believe that these sites are beneficial for people if they use it ethically. Social networking sites have several benefits
such
as it engages people by connecting with others all over the
world
, and allows oneself to share ideas with individuals having a common interest. Facebook updates us with the latest inventions, in fields, we are interested in.
Thus
, we can keep up with the latest trends using social networking sites. I agree with the idea that they have a bad impact on
society
.
Moreover
,
this
is because people are not using them in the right way. These sites are meant
for connecting
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for, connecting
people but
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people, but
not getting engaged to that extent that you even lose
contacts
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contact
with your
society
, local communities. People nowadays talk to individuals living in some other end of the
world
, even though it does not guarantee that they would ever meet in the future. Youth especially get on the wrong track, which
also
creates a negative impact on their studies and work. People should take benefits from
such
social networking sites to gain their knowledge, to express their ideas and thoughts by sharing with people across the
world
. These sites even help you in choosing your interests, developing skills and getting more accurate in your field. If you are from the sales and marketing department, you can have lots of opportunities by exposing your products to the
world
, it’s the most useful way of marketing. Unfortunately, after having so many advantages, we never use them for good. People on their social media keep updating their stories, where they go, what they are doing. We get each hour
updates
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update
on what our friends, colleagues are doing.
That is
now the biggest
concern according
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concern, according
to me, as it is purely related to our privacy.
Also
, social networking sites have a location tag, which is dangerous as if someone who doesn’t like you, or is jealous of you, can you that location and maybe attack you. Along with those people, mostly the youths, get in the trap of
cyberbullying
which often leads to depression and anxiety. So, I think that the main reason for having a bad impact on our
society
by social networking sites is us. We are the ones who are responsible for all these.
Although
social networking sites
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the social networking sites
bring people closer all over the
world
, we certainly get apart from our local relations. Overall, individuals should stay and create a stronger connection with their local communities and
society
, and use social networking sites in a limited manner to keep a balance and maintain a healthy life.
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Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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