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Education is not a luxury, but a basic human right and as such should be free for everyone irrespective of personal wealth. Do you agree or disagree?

#education #luxury #right #wealth
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Schooling is a regular person law, is not a
luxe
lacking in rigor or strictness
lax
locus
louse
, and It ought to be unpaid for all whatever of individual riches. I completely agree that
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 should be free for everyone.
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 essay will discuss why gratis schooling is good.
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 of all, free
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 allows
poor but
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poor, but
 talented people to better realize their gifts. Paid schooling is a big obstacle to the development for penniless but gifted people, so it is more difficult for them to actualize themselves. When
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 is free, a talented person can calmly develop and realize his gifts.
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,
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 of famous
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of or pertaining to or characteristic of Russia or its people or culture or language
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 researchers and scientists could not afford
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 and they had to learn and develop on their own, at the same time, in Europe and USA, talented people were supported by government, so their science their science overtook
our
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, unpaid schooling allows the
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 as a whole to develop better. If all citizens irrespective of individual wealth had a right to gratis schooling, the
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's population would be smarter and more educated. People with
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 make the
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 better and develop it.
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, schooling is completely free in most advanced countries like Germany, Norway, Sweden, Finland, and another. To sum up, free
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 is not a luxury, it should be free for everyone, because it has a lot of advantages for people, the
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, humanity and the world as a whole, but at the same time government spending would increase greatly, but unpaid schooling will bring him many benefits, and help in the development.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fundamental right
  • accessible
  • social mobility
  • personal and professional development
  • overall development
  • equality
  • social disparities
  • access
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