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Some people believe the large shopping malls are replacing local shops which is bad for local economies. What is your opinion?

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Nowadays a popular trend in shopping is the establishment of large shopping malls. Because of the popularity of department
stores small
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stores, small
 shops are at a risk of closure.
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 essay will discuss convenient shopping experience and a cheaper price as advantages of large shopping malls compared to small shops. Shopping at a department store is a more convenient experience than going to several traditional shops to purchase several types of items. In shopping malls, all of the items available under one roof and ample parking facilities are
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 provided. The customer is able to load grocery items, vegetables, fish, fruit, stationary or any other products into a shopping cart and pay at the cashier. Since easier shopping mechanism people prefer shopping malls rather than small shops. Prices of goods in shopping malls are less expensive than other shops. There are various methods which provide financial benefits for customers.
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, there are discount schemes, reward points and promotions are provided even if you visit any of the branches scattered throughout the country.
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 ultimately customers are able to buy good quality products at a cheaper rate.
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 essay discussed convenience and
cheaper price
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a cheaper price
 as advantages of shopping malls compared to small shops.
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, in my opinion, I believe replacing small shops with shopping malls is beneficial for customers.
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