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The process of Pu-erh Raw tea and Ripe tea. make a summary regarding the given diagram.

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A glance at the diagram provides the flow chart for producing
Pu-erh
 raw
tea
 and ripe tear.
Overall
, the process of Pu-eth ripe
tea
 is more complicated than that of
Pu-erh
 raw
tea
 as the former one has one more step.
According to
 the information shown in the diagram,
then
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 process of
the
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both types of
tea
 commences with pan flying and follows with rolling before drying under the sun. The difference takes place after
tea
 leaves become loose raw
tea
.There is a compression procedure before the loose raw
tea
 turns
in to
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into
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Pu-erh
 raw
tea
. After ageing by storage, it results in vintage Pa-erh raw
tea
.
On the other hand
, loose raw
tea
 will become
loose
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 ripe
tea
 after
the
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fermentation by
mold
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.
Finally
, loose ripe
tea
 ends with compression and turns
to
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into
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Pu-erh
 ripe
tea
.
To sum up
,
besides
for
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the
numbers
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 of steps, the timing of compression is
also
 a significant difference between the two kinds of
Pu-erh
tea
.
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Coherence and Cohesion
A brief introduction or overview at the beginning and a concise conclusion or summary at the end can make your writing more effective.
Task Achievement
You effectively identified the key steps in the process and clearly distinguished between Pu-erh raw tea and ripe tea production, showing a good understanding of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay is logically structured, making the information easy to follow.

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