The world is becoming a smaller place because of globalization. Some people dread that culture will inevitably disappear as a result. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Globalization

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is the process of interaction and integration of people, organization and government. There is

ongoing debate

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an ongoing debate

that due to

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globalization

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globalization, culture

culture

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will diminish. In

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consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning

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both sides of the argument. There are several reasons why

globalization

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affects

culture

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and why it is in danger? One of them is that in

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era of quick

transportation tourism

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transportation, tourism

is quite easy. When people from one region come to meet with other region, they will adapt changes and learn other’s

culture

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, it is possible that they forget about their own

culture

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and adapt other

culture

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. Though, the change is good for human

beings but

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beings, but

some people take it as a threat to the

culture

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. Those people who argue that

globalization

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will not inevitably disappear the

culture

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has

different point

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a different point

of view and say that it is actually a good thing. People from different origin mix together and talked about their

culture

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and habits. They share various ideas, while discussing

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about

these things, the importance of

culture

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will be reflected. Without the discussion, they take the

culture

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for granted. While there are strong arguments on both sides of the case my personal view is that in

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era of quick transportation and telecommunication all the world is now a global village. So, from the

globalization

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people will learn from each other.

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culture

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will be identified

and tagged with them

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and tagged them with

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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The world is becoming a smaller place because of globalization. Some people dread that culture will inevitably disappear as a result. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their level of health is decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken?

Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other s think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your own oipinion.

Some people think it is better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. Other people believe it’s good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.