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Around the world, solar energy is becoming a more popular source of energy for many households. Why do you think this is so? What are the advantages and disadvantages of using solar energy to power one’s home?

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One of the greatest threats to modern day living is the depletion of the sources that provide us the
energy
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 to maintain our lives. Most of the world’s current
energy
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 needs get fulfilled from fossil fuels.
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, fossil fuels like petroleum and coal come at a price. They do not only cost us
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money, but
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 degrade our environment by polluting it.
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, these sources of
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 are nowhere close to being renewable and according to some scholars, are at the brink of extinction. Because of the above mentioned issues, renewable sources of
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 like solar
power
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 are getting popularised at an unprecedented rate. Using solar
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 as a source of household
energy
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 has its own unique advantages. Once harnessed, solar
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 has virtually no operational cost;
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 makes it a cheaper option as compared to the other sources of
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.
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, the process of harnessing
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 from the sun does not result in any harm to the environment; it is completely pollution free.
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, every coin has two sides. There are some disadvantages of using solar
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 as a source of domestic
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, too.
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, the semiconductors used in converting solar
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 into electricity are made up of expensive metals,
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 making it costlier to install a solar
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 system.
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, solar
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 systems are hard to maintain because they are made up of glass. Any dust on them obstructs the reflection of sunlight and
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 makes the solar
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 systems inefficient to run.
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, solar
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 systems can only
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produce
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in
 locations where there is plenty of sunshine all year round.
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