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There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the International music that is heard everywhere nowadays?

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Music
 is therapy
to
Suggestion
for
 many. It calms one's soul. It is one of the
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
 pass time of the modern generation. Many people listen to
music
 to feel emotions and other make
music
 to express their emotions.
Music
 is a universal language that connects people, it is the start of many life long relations. Traditional
music
 connects us to our roots. It gives an insight of the life of our ancestors. It is the story of our historical heroes. It is the melody of nationalists. It provokes patriotism within us. Traditional
music
 tells about the struggle of our freedom fighters and gives us hope for humanity. It keeps us close to our culture which has been homogenized. Whereas, international
music
 these days holds no meaning. Most of the new
music
 out in the world is about the money and the cars the singers own. More to that, there is exist a new trend of artist disrespecting other artists and famous personalities, rather than empowering each other, they are trying
bring
Suggestion
to bring
 each other's moral low. Our present generation which spends more time in the virtual world than in the real world needs
music
 which empowers it. It needs
music
 that teaches it to be humble and empathic. It needs hope for the progress and development of the humanity. And not teaches them to be hateful people, which can only be developed by listening to traditional
music
, as what we listen influences our thinking and develops our thoughts.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emotional release
  • cultural significance
  • globalization
  • cultural exchange
  • technology
  • preservation
  • cultural heritage
  • social cohesion
  • expression
  • consumption
  • production
  • traditional music
  • international music
  • diversity
  • identity
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