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As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. Do you agree or disagree?

#money #businesses #responsibilities
Business should
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not only, be considered as a source to earn money, but
also
 it has some duties playing in society.I am agreeing with the fact, owing to the reason that if work is providing people worth
payments
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payments, then
then
 it is mandatory to devote one's responsibilities
towards
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Towards
 the society.
First
 and foremost thing is the answer to the question that, what are the duties that people should pay for their jobs? And the possible answer could be, understanding
problems
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the problems
 of public and fulfilling their needs by heart, even though if they are paid for just sitting in their cabins. Another big contribution should be towards paying
taxes which
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taxes, which
 are applied according to the earnings of people. In my prospective
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enjoying fame from business and not being a responsible businessman is a shameful matter. ,
For instance
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 if a person is gaining benefits from his government job while not submitting the appropriate taxes, is not only
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 against the laws
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 but
also
, it is an issue of being selfish
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 taxes provided by people are utilized in serving the people in turn. In conclusion, it should be understood that
if
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If
 the job is paying for people,
then
 they
are
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have also been
also
 be ever ready to pay for it in turn.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social responsibilities
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Ethical behavior
  • Societal impact
  • Stakeholders
  • Profit-driven
  • Public perception
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Community development
  • Human rights
  • Workplace safety
  • Altruism
  • Balanced approach
  • Accountability
  • Consumer loyalty
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