It is true that in this present scenario sports play an essential role in our lives. Although some people think that physical strength is more important to succeed in sports, I sport the view of other people who believe that mental attitude is more important for success in spots.

On the one side, there are multifarious reasons that why some people think that
fittest and strongest
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the fittest and strongest
is
more important part
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the most important part
most important part
of sports.
first
preceding all others in time or space or degree
First
and foremost, if people are
physical
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physically
fit
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fit, then
then
they will show their performance very well in the front of others since physical fitness is more important for playing dangerous activities.Apart from
this
, there are
lot
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lots
of games are related with
physical strongest
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the physically strongest
physically strongest
such
as, wrestling, stretching and
many
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much
more so
that'why
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that's why
that' why
that why
,
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,
without physical fittest people do not play these games.
for
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For
example
,
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,
the Great
khali
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Khali
is
prominent player
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a prominent player
of wrestling and he is
physical
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physically
fitt
be agreeable or acceptable to
fit
fight
feat
and strong for
this
game. On the other side
,
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,
I
also
support the view of other people who believe that mental
attitude
is more important for success in sports.
Fisrtly
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Firstly
, when people have
mental
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a mental attitude
the mental attitude
attitude
than
physical
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physically
strongest they can easily get high scores in any game because they can spread their nervousness from their mind.
For example
,
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,
in
recent year cricket team
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the recent year cricket team
did not have any experience and knowledge for
playing but
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playing, but
they had positive thinking
for
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of
about
getting
first
rank in
this
match.
Secondly
, there are numerous games are related with mental
attitude
such
as cards, Chess and many more so that's why mental
attitude
is more necessary to play these games.
For instance
,
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,
Bobby fisher is very famous and successful player of chess
.
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.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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