Some people say that music is a good way of bring people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is thought that people like to come together because of
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music even
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music, even
if they did not grow up in the same culture and are not of the same generation. I completely agree with
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opinion and think that
music
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is an effective method to unite people across age and culture.
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of all, I believe that
music
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has the ability to produce happiness and encourage friendliness.
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,
music
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can create a friendly and family-like situation where people gain a sense of belonging to a group so that they are keen to know each other more.
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, the enterprise I used to work for
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being
an international corporation, so the majority of employees came from overseas. To help employees get along well with their colleagues, the company held a
music
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event regularly. That’s why I think that
music
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is a good choice for having people from different cultural backgrounds come together.
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,
music
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has the power to help youth and elders find common interesting things to eliminate the generation gap.
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, it might be easy for young people and
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people to find the same feelings on
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music even
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music, even
though that there are few chances for them to have the same experiences and knowledge in
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a fast-developing society.
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, there is an unbelievable moment when children, parents and grandparents sing together in our community church every Christmas.
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,
music
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is always a good solution when organizers cater to people of all ages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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