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Some believe that it is the responsibility of people to take care of the environment. Others say it is the government that should take care of the environment. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Different people have separate views on how to save the flora and fauna. The politicians who govern the country make rules to conserve natural resources.
Although
, citizens should follow the rules and keep pushing the ruling party to make new laws against the depletion of natural resources. In history, it has been a debate that who has the most responsibility to entertain the conservation of the environment. There were various factors to decide it.
Firstly
, the government should introduce new laws which ensures that people do not harm their surroundings.
For example
, recently, one of the law which has been introduced is to ban the plastics. It leads plastic usage reduction by 70 percent, which is a huge amount in a country like India. All the big vendors have immediately started to follow the order,
otherwise
 have to pay huge fines.
Secondly
, each citizen should feel responsible so that they should not hurt it. There are many ways in which a person can help reduce it.
For instance
, they should throw their garbage in
such
 a way that it can be recyclable.
Moreover
, they can
also
 educate other people to be more eco-friendly by not using products which affect flora and fauna. Usage of CFC (Chlorofluorocarbons) can be reduced by not using cars which use refrigerant as an agent to cool down car engine. In conclusion, it is the duty of both people and government to curb the destruction of natural deposit.
Moreover
, it is a national who can actually make the difference. They can
also
 push the government to make new laws and fight together for a new world. In
this
 way we can make the earth green and prosperous.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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