Shopping online is getting more and more popular in recent years. E-commerce becomes one of the most vibrant industries that represent for new ear of technology. In this essay, drawbacks and benefits of shopping online will be discussed in further details.

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Traditional shopping at offline
store
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or shopping malls is no longer trending anymore.
Consumers
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Consumer
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
has changed from online to offline due to many reasons; convenience, affordable price, etc.
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, online shopping contains implicit risks that should be seriously considered. More and more people buy clothes, shoes, air-tickets, groceries, everything on the
internet
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, and more and more consumers get fooled by fraud sellers with unqualified products.
For instance
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, a fraudulent has been detected on a very well-known e-commerce website, a seller that seems to be a reliable seller displayed a VND 400,000 orange sneaker on their online
store
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, the actual product that every buyer received was a flip-flop that only worth for under VND 50,000.
This
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happened to more than a 200 users on that website and losses up to VND 100 million.
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, if not getting fraud, consumers may
also
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have to deal with wrong information
of
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about
on
products
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the products
that they bought, the actual product cannot be exactly the same as the picture they saw online
such
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as the
color
a visual attribute of things that results from the light they emit or transmit or reflect
colour
, size and other information. In some circumstances and depends on
specific situation
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specific situations
the specific situation
that
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has to be accepted as an unavoidable
drawbacks
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drawback
of shopping online.
On the other hand
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, the reasons for shopping online to become indispensable is that consumers actually found enormous benefits
from
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of
shopping on the
internet
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. Convenience and affordable price are the two strongest drivers for customer’s
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
. People do not have to get out of their house to buying things and going to the shopping malls is obsolete, all they have to do is surfing all the online
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store
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stores
on their smart phone or other
internet
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connected devices
then
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make a click, products are delivered
rights
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right
at their door. They can buy at anytime, anywhere with their devices and
internet
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, they can browse to find all suitable sources of supplier for the best consideration before purchase with just a little amount of time, which is very suitable those who are too busy for their works.
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, most of all products displayed online are cheaper than those sold offline at
traditional
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traditional stores
a traditional store
store
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.
This
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happens because the cost
for
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of
operations and maintenance of traditional
store
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are no longer exist. Buyers do not need to rent a place to open a shop, no need for electricity, water and
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
costs.
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, an affordable price would easily
found
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find
on the
internet
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. Even it will be getting much cheaper since the
ecommerce
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eCommerce
industry is in a very vibrant phase of penetrating the market. Many
ecommerce
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eCommerce
websites in Southeast Asia provide a lot of promotion and rebating support with an effort of winning the market. In the conclusion, there are many risks of shopping
online but
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online, but
advantages
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the advantages
it brings to customers is definitely
outweigh
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outweighed
the disadvantages. I believe in any way of doing purchasing, risks of fraud is unavoidable, shoppers need to aware the clearest how each channels work and their rights when purchasing on those channels. Vice versa, buyers need to provide enough and precise information about the products, middle man
such
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as
ecommerce
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eCommerce
website should set transparent and suitable regulations for both sellers and buyers, how transactions work
on
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in
their market places. Be a smart shopper, especially online shopper for the best leverage of all advantages of
this
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modern type of purchasing and for a healthy economy in general.

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