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In spite of the advances made in agricluture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is the case? What can be done about this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Despite the recent development in the field of agriculture still, a lot of people end up going to bed with an empty stomach all over the world. There are a plethora of reasons for
this
 situation and I think "population explosion" and "food wastage" are the prominent ones among them.
Firstly
, the rate at which the global population is increasing day by day is haunting the governments, it has increased 7 times in the
last
 two centuries, which enunciates the monstrosity of the situation. Gradually, more and more pressure is building upon the governments to satisfy the dietary demands of all the citizens. According to some recent surveys, nearly 800 million people are undernourished globally, which is about one in nine people on earth. To combat
this
 issue, people can be educated about the adverse effects of the population explosion and the benefits of birth control.
For example
, awareness programs conducted by UNICEF and World Health Organization about using condoms and other contraceptives have proven to be useful in controlling the birth rate in developing nations, which is a prominent step in building a hunger-free world.
Secondly
, food-wastage is another horrifying cause for global hunger. As stated by some statistics, annual wastage in India is worth millions of dollars, which is enough to feed the whole state of Punjab for more than a year.
This
 throws some light on the dreadful scenario we are in. Simple changes in lifestyle can help play an instrumental role in
this
 situation,
such
 as donating the leftover foods to NGOs, shopping and cooking smartly to avoid wasting and making the children aware of the importance of food and its wastage on the society.
For example
, an NGO named "Helping Hands" in our city collects leftover food from all the parties and functions in the vicinity and donates it to poor people, doing their part in fighting the hunger demon. In conclusion, I believe global hunger is a major issue in the present society and as responsible human beings, we should do whatever we can to solve the problem and hope one day, no child will starve or be malnourished in the future.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • food scarcity
  • malnutrition
  • sustainable agriculture
  • distribution networks
  • food insecurity
  • subsistence farming
  • agricultural yield
  • food deserts
  • infrastructural development
  • economic disparity
  • global supply chain
  • food sovereignty
  • climate resilience
  • political unrest
  • post-harvest loss
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