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Some people believe that children’s leisure activities must be educational; otherwise they are a complete waste of time. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience.

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It is considered by a part of society that students should have hobbies that contributes to their learnings or else it will end up exploiting their valuable time. In my opinion, I believe learners, while in their academic years should be involved in activities that interests them rather than just adding up to the knowledge as
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 will help them to develop a new skill set and makes them more productive. Leisure pursuits might bring the talent out of young minds, which will be an addition to their competence and can lead to a successful career.
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, with the growing opportunities in all the fields, youth can choose between their passion and studies, provided if they have notable expertise apart from studies.
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, “Sachin Tendulkar” didn’t complete his high school,
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 he is amongst the list of most successful people. Because of his interest in cricket, since childhood.
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, the country will get more and more talented citizens into distinct fields which will help in gradual nation growth.
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, it will create employment and help dragging down the poverty. An activity conducted based on self interest will enhance productivity. Having a relaxation activity encourages people to take breaks from their planned schedule,
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 boosting up the concentration.
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, a research study has proven that the human brain tends to memorize and learn things better if given a break every 45 minutes of reading.
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, most of the educational institutions motivates students to indulge in non-curriculum activities like arts, music, sports, etc.
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, spending time in the activity that interests the learners bring the feeling of motivation and confidence, which
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 helps to yield better results in academics as well. In conclusion,
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 of having a book knowledge, it is equally significant to have a competence based out of self-interest like painting, reading, writing to help improvise the abilities which in future can pursue as a profession and raise the individual efficiency.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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