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In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting University studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decided to do this?

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In terms of some regions, students who completed college studies and that they are uplifted to the employment or
travel
 for the
volunteer
work
 around the world or inbound country until they start in university life. Both
travel
 and
work
 and much more advantages and some disadvantages too.
First
 and foremost, having an employment for a year
is make
Suggestion
has made
is made
makes
 more benefits to the University students because sometimes University students have to find another locate some
informations
a message received and understood
information
 from some companies for their assignments.
For
instance some
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instance, some
 students have to find financial information about a particular company at the moment, if students have working experience in the financial institutes that students can find details very easily.
On the other
hand some
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hand, some
 students are supposed to spend that year with their
family relations
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family, relations
 and friends but if that students are encouraged to
work
 they do not get plenty of time to spend with their expectation. Please a disadvantage of uplifted to the
work
.
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 to the other side, get more valuable experience, learn how to deal with different cultures, nations and
work
 as a
volunteer
 are the most effective reasons for the
travel
 a year after high School.
This
 kind of
activities consider
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activities, considers
activities considers
 as an additional qualification and most of
time
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the time
 the activities are
mention
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mentioned
 in their resumes.
For example
, some job interviews consider about some relative
volunteer
work
 from the candidate.
In contrast
, some
volunteer
work
 or
travel
have
Suggestion
has
 to face some significant problems
such
 as students
travel
 another destination for a
volunteer
work
 and can be
faced
produced by or subjected to forcing
forced
 to the cultural problems and issues with foods. In conclusion, according to some countries, students after complete college studies, inspired to
enroll
register formally as a participant or member
enrol
 with the job of
travel
 and tailgate University openings.
Bahut
 benefits and disadvantages here with the
travel
 and
work
.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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