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Some people think high-end technology can prevent and cut down the rate of committing crime. Do you agree or disagree?

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People
mindset
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 has been changes and now they do not afraid from committing
crime
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, and due to the fact crimes are increasing day by day. People think that use of the
technology
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 can help them to stop and slow down the
rate
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 of committing
crime
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 and
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my
 support
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 view because of people will fear that they can get caught and it reduces the long trails of cases. To start with,
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, People commit
crime
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 and repeat
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 again and again because they have the
mindset
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 that they can escape. Previously, people commit
crime
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 and runaway without any footprints. They hide in places where nobody knows them and start a new life which makes their
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 that they escape. But uses of the
technology
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 breaks their trust. To explain, currently the investigation team uses
technology
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 to help themselves. Due to use of
technology
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, people afraid to get caught which helps them to change their
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 and result of
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crime
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rate
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 is reduced. To illustrate with an
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, according to a survey from The Times of India, The
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rate
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 has been reduced to 25 percent after uses of technologies. One another essential point is justice delayed. People commit
crime
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 and have the
mindset
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 that delayed their cases can help them to escape. But uses of
technology
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 are helping in reducing
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 time. Trail with Video conferencing are classical
example
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 of
this
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. Previously, People commit
crime
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 and hide in different cities and states. Even after they get caught, it takes months to transfer their cases or make in person available to the court where the
crime
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 actually happened. But now, Police authority uses
technology
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 to get rid of
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 problems. Trail with video conferencing is one
such
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example
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 where commuter does not need to present in-person, To illustrate with an
example
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, according to a survey from The Times of India, The
crime
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rate
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 has been reduced to 25 percent after uses of technologies. To conclude, People have ill
mindset
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 that thinks they can escape after committing some kind of crimes, but
technology
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 breaks
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mindset
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 of people and helps authority to reduce
crime
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 rates.

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