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Should education and healthcare be free of charge and funded by thr government or should it be the responsibility of the people to pay for these services? give reasons for your answer and relevant examples.

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It is commonly observed phenomenon that progress and development of
amy
one or some or every or all without specification
any
 country
is depends
Suggestion
depend
 on the level of
education
 and health of its citizens. A handful of people reckons that whether
government
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the government
 can invest
money
 to provide these kind of facilities free of
charge
Accept comma addition
charge, such
such
as medical facility
Suggestion
as a medical facility
 as well as
education
, or people ought to understand their
responsibilty
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibility
responsibilities
 to get these
sevices
performance of duties or provision of space and equipment helpful to others
services
devices
 by paying. To open the deliberation side, there are two prominent factors say that why
government
 should focus on
this
 side,
first
 of all, there are countless people, who are not capable to purchase medicine in order to secure their
life
Suggestion
lives
. In
this
 case,
government
 should help them by providing funds for their health,
for
example in
Accept comma addition
example, in
 the USA, it is
basic right
Suggestion
a basic right
the basic right
 of every citizen to availed free healthcare treatment.
As a result
, individuals have better conditions of health.
Moreover
, children, who want to acquire
education
Suggestion
an education
, and they want to go to school like
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 children, but their parents cannot afford it for their children, so
government
Suggestion
the government
 must check it and provide funds that they collect from industries, transportation system and so on as a tax.
Then
 some part of
money
Suggestion
government money can
government
 can invest
on
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in
school system
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the school system
a school system
school systems
. As a
consequences
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consequence
,
illiteracy rate
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the illiteracy rate
from
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of
 any country can be reduced. On the
paradoxicle
seemingly contradictory but nonetheless possibly true
paradoxical
 side, higher
education
 and expensive
healthcare
Suggestion
health care
 treatments should be paid by citizens themselves, because most of people have too much
money
, so they can easily take medicine facility and can provide better
education
 to their children,
Therefore
,
government
 should invest
money
 on poor people, who have no more
money
 and income sources, rather than on rich people. Apart from
this
,
government
Suggestion
the government
 will not have to invest more
money
 on these services and can easily concentrate on
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 work to provide services to individuals
such
 as better road
facilties
a building or place that provides a particular service or is used for a particular industry
facilities
 and agriculture facilities. To conclude,
althought
even though, in spite of the fact that
although
 most of people believe that people should pay
money
 to get medicine or
education
, but it is
also
trust
Suggestion
trusting
 of
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
individuals
Suggestion
individuals, government
individual government
individual individual government
individuals' government
government
 should provide funds to serve these facilities to individuals, if people will spend better lifestyle and take
education
,
then
 it will great opportunity to reduce
illitracy rate
Suggestion
the illiteracy rate
illiteracy rate
 and illness of people.

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