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Nowadays, families are not as close as in the past and a lot of people have become used to it

#families #people
In
this
 day and age, the topic of the reduction of family closeness among people is one which bears some consideration.
This
 scenario has resulted from the Internet and the imbalance between work and family, which possibly leads to the losts of family sentiment in people. The foremost reason for
this
 problem is the
overdevelopment
 of the Internet. No one can deny how convenient, useful and entertaining the Internet is nowadays compared to the past.
However
, people, especially the young generation, tend to misuse it. They spend more time for online recreation than for
family
Suggestion
families
the family
. An overall picture of Vietnamese families currently is that after dinner, everyone is busy using their smartphones so that there is little to no talking between family members including siblings, parents and children or even between partners. We are living in a materialistic world where having money means having power, so earning money for a good living has become a primary goal for many people. They spend so many hours working incessantly that they gradually forget about their family lives.
As a result
, there will be a decrease in mutual care and understanding
between
Suggestion
among
 family members, children can lack support or become depressed because of their parents’ absence. One cannot get a good family life, without enough family talks and advice, one won’t feel the family sentiment. And a society in which people no longer understand the importance of bonds of kinship will become an unhappy society.
Thus it
Accept comma addition
Thus, it
 can be seen that the reduction of family closeness is the outcome of the Internet and imbalanced working schedules. If
this
 reduction keeps happening and people get familiar with it, sooner or later, there will be no
such
 thing as a family. As the old saying goes, use it or lose it.
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