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Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into university difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

#accessibility #university
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Some people think accepted a
university
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 should be difficult, whether the applicant is poor or rich. I think, increasing the number of educated people is significant for the society. To start with,
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 reason,
everybody
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 wants to take a course from a
university
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 is should be placed easily. It is clear that high-educated people contributes more benefit for the society. Fundamental human resources in which developed countries have occurred advantages in some area
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 as economic, social, technical. They face to how the important to eliminate illustration in order to overpass problems in the society, even individual.
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, in my country every city has a
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 in the
last
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 decade and local people access easily there. Not only intelligence but
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 economical contribution is rising visible in rural. It is not important how much money the people earned,
everybody
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 can take a course from a lecturer
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 not hardly.
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, poor people have disadvantages in order to go
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 and equality in education opportunity is significant. If a wealthy person accepts a
university
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 easier than poor, some scholar or lecturer should be encouraged person who has under the average income because of restricting discrimination.
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, some scholarships are given only poor students. To say it that,
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take
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takes
 a
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 degree rich or vice versa. In conclusion, educated people are valuable for the community and all universities can be accessible for
everybody
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 without revenue differences.
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