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You recently sent some documents by post, but they did not arrive at the destination. Write a letter to the post office manager. In your letter, give details of the situation describe the documents say what action you want the post office to take

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Dear Sir/Madam, I hope
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 are doing well and in good health. I am writing
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 letter to let you know that the documents that I recently sent through the USPS were not delivered
at
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 the rightful destination. Here is the tracking number on the receipt (1234567). I was told that
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 mail will be sent no later than five business days and it is more than two weeks now.
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 post contains the invitations to my graduation which is in
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 of months.
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, it is very important to reach the destination
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because
 my parents are relying on
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 to apply for
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 visa to visit
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 occasion. Time is of
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 at
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 point
of
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in
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 time. If you think
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 document is lost, I want an intimation right away and if possible I would like you to provide me a free express shipping because these cards need to
reach
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 in three days. Looking forward to hearing back from you. Yours faithfully, Sasha Kota.

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Task Achievement
You've done an excellent job detailing the issue and the action you desire. To strengthen your letter further, consider clarifying or elaborating on some of the documents' specific details, like their content or why they are irreplaceable, to underline their importance.
Coherence & Cohesion
Your letter flows well from introduction to conclusion, which makes it easy to follow. To enhance coherence, you might add a brief paragraph acknowledging any steps you've already taken, like contacting customer service, to try to resolve the situation. This would provide a more comprehensive view of the issue at hand.
Task Achievement & Coherence & Cohesion
The formal tone and structure of your letter are very appropriate, effectively addressing the post office manager with the respect and urgency the situation demands.
Coherence & Cohesion
You have logically structured your letter, introducing the problem, detailing the importance of the documents, and specifying the action you want the post office to take, which makes your message clear and persuasive.
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