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The recent popularity of online shopping will result in the end of high street shops. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Thanks to globalization and the advent of the internet, online shopping has become increasingly popular in most parts of the world.
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, I disagree that
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 recent popularity of online shops will lead to the closure of high
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 shops for three reasons. The attraction for online shopping pales in comparison with the social and physical benefits that come with going to traditional shops. Shopping in high
street
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 stores is a good way of socializing with friends and family. They can get together and go to shops, which might prove useful as
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 activity could reduce stress and improve the bonds.
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,
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 get-together might be a free physical activity for people who are overwhelmed with their jobs since shoppers need to move from one store to another to find the most suitable clothes or other products. Another reason why I think that traditional shops remain has to do with the economy. High
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 shops, which pay
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 to the government, employ a number of people, who
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 pay income
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 to the state.
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, when shopping online, one does not have to pay
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 or
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 is usually smaller. For
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 reason, the popularity of online shops does not impact the existence of high
street
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 shops.
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, the recent prevalence of global online shops has brought about environmental concerns. When shipping
the large
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larger
 quantities of goods using air, sea and road transportation,
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 way of delivering the products to their consumers results in severe damage to the environment. That said, some people could argue that shoppers can buy a wide variety of quality products at reasonable prices using online shopping. I would,
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, argue that
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 little financial benefit is costing a lot at the expense of harm to the atmosphere. In conclusion, not only is shopping in high
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 stores good for socializing, but
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 way of shopping is
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 helping to stimulate the economy.
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 online
shops
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shopping
 are convenient and less time-consuming, they are having a detrimental effect on the environment.
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, I disagree that high
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 shops will disappear in the future.
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