Adults do less exercise these days. Some people think that showing sports events on the television such as the Olympics and international tournaments is the best way to encourage adults to do exercise. Others believe there are more effective ways to do so. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is true that doing exercise more important in mature age to maintain

healthy life

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a healthy life

and want some

mortivate

provided with a motive or given incentive for action

motivated

to do so. Some people believe that promote

sport

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sporting

events on television make adults to do exercises and other believe there are other alternatives better than that.

This

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essay will discuss both

point

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points

of views and totally agree with that, there are better and effective ways to encourage mature people to do physical activities.

Firstly

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, there are

number

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a number

of sports channels

such

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as ESPN, Start Sports and Ten Sports showing

sport

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sports

games, events all around the world. Most of the old people watch those television channels for a number of hours without doing anything.

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, as

for

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the recent studies of BMC public health

center

an area that is approximately central within some larger region

centre

it is clear that watching elite athletes have no role in promotion of exercise in adults but will lead to high risk of obesity.

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, improving sport facilities, cheap or free gyms and social events can

engage in

make

the change what we wish for since old people will come and

then

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do the physical activities in there.

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then

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they do not want to spend money, they can meet and talk with new people

thus

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make their loneliness go away.

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, adults will come out and do the exercises like running, jogging and swimming if their family members have joined them. For an example, my father

always join

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always joins

me when I do my exercises daily and even he asked

mom

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to join with us. In conclusion, it is not a rocket science that doing is better than the watching and I believe that spending time with people make physical activities more effective. It

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also enhance

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also enhances

adults physical and mental health and will route to long life ahead

Thu Jan 23 2020

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