The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram below describes the steps taken in the recycling process of
Aluminium
cans
; a process which seems to be of
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vital importance in the UK in which 74% of the
Aluminium
cans
that are sold are recycled. The process consists of seven steps, starting with the
Aluminium
cans
being taken to special containers to be separated from the other types of refuse. After that,
cans
are collected by special recycling trucks and
then
taken to a facility where they are first cleaned and
then
sorted.
Next
, special machines are used to fragment the
cans
and
then
flatten them. The metal is
then
heated to a high enough temperature to allow the
Aluminium
to melt. It is
then
furled to a thickness between 2.5mm and 6.0mm, depending on what it is going to be used for. The
Aluminium
cans
now are ready to be recycled into new packaging, namely; as drink containers.
Finally
, the
cans
are
then
delivered to soft drinks manufacturers where they are sold to the public to be reused.
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