The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram below describes the steps taken in the recycling process of
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cans
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; a process which seems to be of
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vital importance in the UK in which 74% of the
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cans
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that are sold are recycled. The process consists of seven steps, starting with the
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cans
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being taken to special containers to be separated from the other types of refuse. After that,
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are collected by special recycling trucks and
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taken to a facility where they are first cleaned and
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sorted.
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, special machines are used to fragment the
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and
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flatten them. The metal is
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heated to a high enough temperature to allow the
Aluminium
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to melt. It is
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furled to a thickness between 2.5mm and 6.0mm, depending on what it is going to be used for. The
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cans
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now are ready to be recycled into new packaging, namely; as drink containers.
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, the
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are
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delivered to soft drinks manufacturers where they are sold to the public to be reused.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words aluminium, cans with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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