It is more important for school children to learn about local history than world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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History
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is an important subject at school. Some people prompt the
ideal
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idea
that local
history
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plays a more important role compared to world
history
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. In my opinion, I partially disagree with
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. National
history
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benefits
schoolchildren
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school children
in various ways. The countries’
history
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tells the kids about its origin, explain how people lived in the past, what people have done in certain historical events. All of the local historic facts contribute to the national culture. Learning the
history
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of the kids’
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country not
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country, not
only acknowledges them about the
events but
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events, but
also
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explains to them some of the cultural traditions.
For example
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, the occurrence of
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….
In addition
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, the
past
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past, history
history
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will enhance the national pride
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of
the children, which keeps the children love their
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more. From historical events, children learn about the tradition and dignity of their ancestors and continue keeping as well as developing them.
Vietnamese tradition
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The Vietnamese tradition
of tacking foreign enemies has been
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preserved
throughout the period of building and protecting the countries, and nowadays,
the young
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the younger
generation is taught and keep the pride of the tradition. Worldwide
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,
on the other hand
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,
can not
can not
cannot
be underestimated. Learning what happened around the world helps us explain some events,
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, the interaction between countries and inside the nation itself.
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, the global colonization happened due to the economic crisis is among the Western countries.
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, studying the past broadens our minds in understanding other
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's past, which strengthens solidarity amongst the nations. In conclusion, local
history
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is essential for every child in a
country
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, but
can not
can not
cannot
deny the importance the world
history
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in children’s education.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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